Thanks for your kind words LackedSaucer, I appreciate the feedback!
In response to your question, I wrote Valon as a young boy who is quite mature for his age, but a boy nonetheless. It wasn’t my own impression that he had the thoughts or voice of a young man, nor the build, seeing as the only description I gave was that he was “tall for his eleven years.” I’d be interested in getting a second opinion on the matter, because that could be a very important tonal issue if its an opinion shared by others.
I’d be delighted to hear any ideas and further feedback you have, I have a fair idea where the story is going and chapter two is firmly in the works. This chapter is something of a first draft, and I’m not 100% satisfied with it yet, if I do post second chapter on here it will be alongside a revised first chapter.
Once again, thanks for your valuable feedback, I’d love to hear some theories about where you think the story is headed!